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Revise the provided info to bring it closer to GitLab tone and style.

doc/development/chatops_on_gitlabcom.md

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 info: To determine the technical writer assigned to the Stage/Group associated with this page, see https://about.gitlab.com/handbook/engineering/ux/technical-writing/#assignments
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-# Chatops on GitLab.com
+# ChatOps on GitLab.com
 
 ChatOps on GitLab.com allows GitLab team members to run various automation tasks on GitLab.com using Slack.
 
 ## Requesting access
 
-GitLab team-members may need access to Chatops on GitLab.com for administration
+GitLab team-members may need access to ChatOps on GitLab.com for administration
 tasks such as:
 
 - Configuring feature flags.
 - Running `EXPLAIN` queries against the GitLab.com production replica.
 - Get deployment status of all of our environments or for a specific commit: `/chatops run auto_deploy status [commit_sha]`
 
-To request access to Chatops on GitLab.com:
+To request access to ChatOps on GitLab.com:
 
-1. Log into <https://ops.gitlab.net/users/sign_in> **using the same username** as for GitLab.com (you may have to rename it).
-    1. You could also use the "Sign in with" Google button to sign in, with your GitLab.com email address.
-1. Ask one of your team members to add you to the `chatops` project in Ops. They can do it by running `/chatops run member add <username> gitlab-com/chatops --ops` command in the `#chat-ops-test` Slack channel.
-1. If you had to change your username for GitLab.com on the first step, make sure [to reflect this information](https://gitlab.com/gitlab-com/www-gitlab-com#adding-yourself-to-the-team-page) on [the team page](https://about.gitlab.com/company/team/).
+1. Sign in to [Internal GitLab for Operations](https://ops.gitlab.net/users/sign_in)
+   with one of the following methods:
+
+   - The same username you use on GitLab.com. You may have to choose a different
+     username later.
+   - Clicking the **Sign in with Google** button to sign in with your GitLab.com email address.
+
+1. Confirm that your username in [Internal GitLab for Operations](https://ops.gitlab.net/)
+   is the same as your username in [GitLab.com](https://gitlab.com/). If the usernames
+   don't match, update the username at [Internal GitLab for Operations](https://ops.gitlab.net/).
+
+1. Comment in your onboarding issue, and tag your onboarding buddy and your manager.
+   Request they add you to the `ops` ChatOps project by running this command
+   in the `#chat-ops-test` Slack channel, replacing `<username>` with your username:
+   `/chatops run member add <username> gitlab-com/chatops --ops`
+
+   <!-- vale gitlab.FirstPerson = NO -->
+
+    > Hi `__BUDDY_HANDLE__` and `__MANAGER_HANDLE__`, could you please add me to
+    > the ChatOps project in Ops by running this command:
+    > `/chatops run member add <username> gitlab-com/chatops --ops` in the
+    > `#chat-ops-test` Slack channel? Thanks in advance.
+
+   <!-- vale gitlab.FirstPerson = YES -->
+
+1. Ensure you've set up two-factor authentication.
+1. After you're added to the ChatOps project, run this command to check your user
+   status and ensure you can execute commands in the `#chat-ops-test` Slack channel:
+
+   ```plaintext
+   /chatops run user find <username>
+   ```
+
+   The bot guides you through the process of allowing your user to execute
+   commands in the `#chat-ops-test` Slack channel.
+
+1. If you had to change your username for GitLab.com on the first step, make sure
+   [to reflect this information](https://gitlab.com/gitlab-com/www-gitlab-com#adding-yourself-to-the-team-page)
+   on [the team page](https://about.gitlab.com/company/team/).
 
 ## See also
 
-- [Chatops Usage](../ci/chatops/README.md)
+- [ChatOps Usage](../ci/chatops/README.md)
 - [Understanding EXPLAIN plans](understanding_explain_plans.md)
 - [Feature Groups](feature_flags/development.md#feature-groups)